Talk:The Hidden Army/@comment-28650617-20161122054508

I cried several times throughout the story so far. It is dark and awful in a wonderful wonderful way. I found one spelling/grammar error in Chapter 4: " She took a few paces back to look at me and her face broke into a tentative smile. “Thank you! He’s always so horrible to me, and he wins every time we fight… It’s mean to be a secret, and I probably shouldn’t tell you, but you know he once trapped me in a burrow? I thought I was going to die!”"

The deaths and friendships and betrayals are very powerful in this fanfiction. The descriptions alone are amazing. Your writing styles go very well together, and I am very impressed with how it has turned out.

I can't wait to read the next chapter!! :D