Talk:Into the Darkness/@comment-26053883-20170722201615

I really like this! The plot was interesting and unexpected, and it wasn't cliche at all. I feel bad for Rosepaw and Leafpaw, and even Fightingspirit. There were a few grammar mistakes that kind of took away from the story, but the story itself was pretty good. I'd like to know more about the Valley cats. Who were they once? Did they all come from ThunderClan? Why do they have all those traditions and rituals, and why do they hate the Clans?

Foxtail was interesting too, but I wonder why he ever brought his kits into the group if they were that vicious. He clearly opposed the killing. Maybe he only started to care when it has his own kits? I don't really know. It's also odd how quickly Fightingspirit takes to the group. I understand her thinking, but it's a little soon to be murdering your siblings for them. There might have been a timeskip there, but it was a little unclear.