Talk:The Hidden Army/@comment-24038939-20161025024444

Wow, I love it. <3

It just pulled me in and I kind of read without really knowing what it was about, and so far I really like it, and you both did an awesome job at explaining what was going on. Also, I like how it's first person. I prefer first person. I think it could probably use a little editing, there was one line that didn't make sense to me-

" “What makes us powerful? What makes us able to defeat an enemy? Caring, power, strength, or knowledge.”"

Because the whole bit about power is a little redundant to me. Anyways, I really do love it :D

Can't wait for more ^^