Talk:Hunger of the Shadows/@comment-28650617-20170322053913

I love this! The start is very detailed and well-thought out, but like Steppy said, the rest doesn't quite live up to its introduction. I think that this story might do better as a full fanfiction, or a longer one-shot. I really really like the ideas put into this, but I got a little confused in the middle, and was pretty lost by the conclusion. Please keep me updated if you add anything to this :D