Talk:Frostfeather's Origins/@comment-31686202-20180210212335

Do you mind if I tell you what’s great about it and also give you a few pointers?

Ok well I’m doing it anyway XD

It’s really good, beautifully depicted, very clear and easy to understand.

However Frostfeather doesn’t seem to have much of a personally which can make the text boring at times because I can’t see her reactions to anything apart from “I refuse to be a Clan cat”

Maybe you could at a sentence here and there, or slip an extra word or thought in, that will really help us connect with and understand Frostfeather? (If that’s where you’re going :P )

Cause at the moment I don’t really like Frostfeather. If I had to describe her I’d say: she seems like a bit of a sook because she wasn’t the most popular cat in the Clan.

I’m just suggesting that you try and give her some good solid character.

Not trying to be rude, I do enjoy reading the events, I’d just like to see more from Frostfeather :)