Talk:The Hidden Army/@comment-27313198-20161122054707

AA I LOVE YOUR WRITING BOTH OF YOU

This is just amazing.

I love the character development. They've never had any personality or anything in the books, and wow, you two just made them more realistic. And the description is just perfect. Fern, you have such great word choice. The beginning and ends of each chapter are also really good. They pull people in and end really well. And the deaths were really well-written and SAD. :(  But seriously,  I love how you wrote Sunstrike's death, it's so detailed and sad. And Furzepelt after it really adds a lot to Sunstrike.

There's some points where I feel like it gets a little repetitive with some words and could be fixed. Apart from that, this is just great. :D I can't wait for chapter 5!

(I hate Petalfur. She's so stuck-up. But Beetlewhisker is awesome. <3 )