Talk:Prophecy of Two/@comment-29717188-20161201142603

Jewelpaw, this is pretty good. The plot's interesting. But, you know, you could use italic text for emphasis as well as the POV's thoughts, and maybe use less dialogue and more paragraphs to explain and show action, not to mention more punctuation. I'm sorry if this sounds confusing - I'm not good at expressing my thoughts in English.