Thread:EosOfTheDawn/@comment-33008190-20161023234937/@comment-33008190-20161024014649

The second chapter is posted.

Two other problems, Fern:

1. When editing, you switched between past tense and present tense words, and it completely messed everything up. One moment it's TALKIGN abort the past, and then you do a verb that happens in the moment. You should fix that next time, so it isn't all over the place.

Eg: I remember how he had said those words. He walks up to me and takes my arms."

2. Mistakes. Errors. Typos. I spotted over 10 mistakes that YOU made, while editing MY chapter. Fern, fix that. You're supposed to be taking out errors, not making them.