Talk:Royal with Love/@comment-27669385-20170313173643

This is really great, Steppy! I like the length of the chapters and the plot. I think it's quite detailed and well-written. I've noticed a few inconsistencies in the punctuation/grammar (not sure which to call it), such as these.

"Please don't hurt us",

"Father!",

The commas aren't necessary at the end (Unless I'm totally wrong and have been writing wrong for years :P), and a new line should be started when someone else speaks. But I think it's a really great story, and it was a very enjoyable read.

(I hope this doesn't offend you, it's not intended to be harmful in any way! Only what I noticed. :))