Talk:Pantherheart's Story - Fanfic of My OC/@comment-27725192-20170712013934

PROLOGUE

I love the imagery and detail you've woven into this! I can visualize a lot of things which I often can't really do in most fanfiction (meaning my own) so great job there! I also love how you show, not tell because as a reader, I don't really like things being thrust at me, and I prefer guessing things myself (as long as I have enough context clues to do so, though XD)

CHAPTER ONE

Hmmm. First of all, I wonder why Pantherheart has a warrior name as a rogue. I'm speculating that her mother was a former warrior-turned-rogue and gave her daughter a warrior name. Wow, Robintail is quite the kind she-cat and wow, Pantherheart is quite stubborn! I personally think she should be more grateful for death via deathberries is quite painful according to the books.

Still, she seems to appreciate Robintail's actions inside and seems intrigued by the Clan. I feel like this won't be the first time she encounters these cats - who knows, she might even join them!

Overall, good job so far! I think I'll be following this and commenting more! I also added some categories, hope you don't mind!