Talk:Hunger of the Shadows/@comment-27725192-20170303023531

I'll be honest, the beginning really dragged me in. Why is Wolfstar giving all the prey to ShadowClan? Why does only Firewind want to do something about it? I do not see Firewind as a villain as he/she wants to help their Clan because their leader doesn't put them first.

With no offense (really!), I feel the rest is a bit rushed. I don't get why the other warriors are on their leader's side when he is starving them. I feel like everyone's against Firewind just for the sake of bringing out his villainy, and I wonder why Firewind didn't notice a change when it was realized he was planning to murder his leader and deputy. It seems quite rushed to me and I wish we had time to look back on Firewind's past and have more insight on RiverClan's past and the whole situation that aggravates Firewind.

Sorry if I offended you, I was trying to be constructive. But you really did a great job and I think you're a great writer!