Talk:Submissions for Kate's Birthday - FANFICTION/@comment-27039035-20151030034703/@comment-27039035-20151030042002

The prologue was good, especially that ending! It was really suspenceful and hooked the reader in! Alas, differentiating between your main characters and ensuring they all have a unique enough voice can be tricky. I'm not very good at it myself. Flamefeather, at the moment, seems bent on serving his clan well. (I believe he mentioned becoming leader one day? I can't recall. I could be mistaken.) You might want to jazz him up a tad, as to set him apart from Brownshade. I liked how you added his soon-to-be crush on Hazelpaw. I have to admit, I'm a sucker for romance and enjoy when an author even hints at it. I'm also interested to see how the relationship between Brownshade and Spottedfrost develops. Hehe! :)

Ooooh, I'm psyched to meet Harewhisker and Heathercloud! Maybe they'll be my favorites, too!

No, sadly, I don't have any current stories. Right now a few ideas are formulating, though. Hopefully they get made into something soon! I'm considering even setting a goal to write a page of something -- doesn't matter what -- each day, so by the end of the year, I'll have 365 pages of random work!

I'm dog-tired and better hit the hay! Goodnight!